Wow, this 1 was pretty long, but you still managed to keep me intrigued thru the whole thing, great use of words... 5/5

Ooo. This has to be my favourite of yours. It has such emotion under layers of a story. But I think it should be in the sad poems or the dark poems instead. I just think it would make more sense.

Again, the rhymes are cliche, and I know you can do much better. Your style seems to go all over the place with the stanzas. One is like 4 lines, and then a little bit farther, the stanas have like 2 or 3 lines. o.O It confused me. Lol. I don't know if it's intentional or not, or whatever. I just thought I might point it out. It made me kind of confused, but to others it may not. I'm not 100% sure lol. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

+.+ Everyone writes so long!! Lol. I too lazy, so I'll just tell you I liked it. :). I liked how you described it, how she was feeling, and the scenery. It's sad, cuz she's regretting not wearing her life jacket, and now it's too late..:( +.+

Very good poem! The flow was nice, and not to forced. Very different, not something one reads very offten

I like the poem, just not the face of drowning. that my worst fear!! but i love the decription of your words. and how you tell how you tell what your body is going through