Hmm...I did like this poem. But not like your other ones. I thought this one kind of reminded me of my poem, 'Rejection', but I wasn't so sure.

This poem, honestly, had no flow. It was like everything was squished into one line, and then in the next, there were 2 words. I just couldn't read it through without not being confused. I got confused with the words, and with the rhymes and everything.

In some places, the rhymes seemed cliche to me. But in other places, they were quite original. I didn't know how you put the rhymes in here. Whether they were off the top of your head, or you got some help somehow. But either way, some of them were cliche.

This poem also didn't make much sense to me. I mean...the 'plot' to it. Like you were saying 'to the people' quite constantly. It got confusing with the lines, and it also didn't make sense. It was like you were saying 'to the people...' and you didn't end your sentence. Whether this was intentional or not, I thought it was weird lol. Sorry if you feel offended with any of this. It's just exactly what I thought. =) 4/5 xoxo

Samantha

U go girrl, so tru.... anything that duznt kill u only makes u stronger.... i loved this poem, lots of intense powerfull words conveying ur feelings and making it all the more emotional and easy to relate to... i loved it 5/5

I like it how you used reptition at the very begining, I felt it made a stronger effect. Good work, and thanks for commenting on my poem.