This was a well researched topic. You even had the proper scientific name for the lion. The style was on par and it was very interesting. A well written nature poem.

First I did enjoy the style and your imagery was decent enough to feel as if you, the reader, is an intruder on the lion's afternoon, in a good way honestly. it sets the reader up to feel as if they were there.

I don't know much about lions but I think I heard that they, the cubs, don't stay with both parents. Again I could be wrong but it's a minor hting because if I am wrong then you have a beautiful interaction of baby cubs trying to mimic their father.

For some reason I don't like the word a with hungry pride but that could just be me. Otherwise I liked the poem.

I really liked this poem..it was visual and very discriptive for a short poem. Very nice use of words and its creates such a perfect little picture..Good job 5/5

Hey i'm not an expert on these types of poems, but i'll comment anyway....
i think it was really good, the idea and everything, but for some reason all the ideas dont seem to match up, at least in my mind... i think its the lines

Searching for wildebeest
To share with a hungry pride

Cubs bound playfully around him
Mimicking his success in the hunt

and in between the first and second half of it, it may just be me, but the transition wasnt very clear... maybe making the transition a bit clearer(?) well, if i have completely got the wrong idea or it just isnt clicking in MY head, tthen sorry:) haha but yea... there ya go

Beautiful job. You used this style in a graceful, smooth way.
"wildebeest" Should be wild beast

Keep it up

I enjoyed the imagery here, it was powerful yet peaceful.
The flow was nice and I ejoyed the wording.

You dabbled nicely! It is an excellent poem, nothing wrong with it. You kept the main topic, the flow, and it was all accurate! Great write, please r/r/c on "the mirror" and the other three of your choice.

-Thanks

Wow, very interesting structure, there is deffinately nothing wrong with it, the use of peaceful imagery made it more powerful, the rhythm was good.. loved it 5/5

Wow, I honestly usually don't like this type of poem but this one was really good. Keep ip the great work and that perfect flow.

xxEvilAngelxx

Ooh, this was great hun. The descripitons were powerful and really added effect. The imagery was great and I could almost imagine the picture. It was just missing a little bit of detail for my liking, but I know it is hard when you have a rhyme scheme to follow. The flow was good as well. All in all, very nicely done! 5/5

It was missing some detail, didnt really interest me, althouh it was a good topic and you have pulled off a tricky style, well done
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Awesome poem. Loved the imagery.

Wow. thats all i have to say. i've never seen this done before where the syllables went up one in almost every line other than the first two and the last two. amazing. great poem. i liked the topic too it was very unique.