Nice job. I liked the romantic topic and the way you ended. It's not your best I'll admit. I prefer love poems to be more abstract...with more descriptions such as metaphors. Keep it up

I liked it.......it was nice. It had a good rhythem to it and I liked the way it rhymes.

Allison

I'm a city boy looking for a country girl
But I've searched all over the world

^^I loved those two lines, Darien!! It kinda reminds me of that song "Uptown girl" Haha! Nice job, SMAWCE brother. ;P

The poem was written nicely, with a good smooth flow, and beautiful words!! I loved it!! keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Awww that is so sweet!
I liked everything about this. Teh flow was flawless, the sentiment true and pure and the little story was nice.
Perfect.

I really enjoyed this, it was so sweet and heartfelt, and the ending made me smile.
I liked the flow, wording and imagery yet again.
I hope you never stop writing.

Lovely written, within well emotions penned you potray here, so heartfelt..... an enjoyed myread here, keep them coming, best wishes. bert ~

Aaahhhh, that's so sweet. it's deep to. GR8 JOB:)

So very sweet...good job!
Charisma*

This is a really good poem. it flows really nicely.

Awwhs` . Darien, this is hekca sweet , so heartfelt . It madee me smilee (: The flow wasn`t perfect, but hey, I think the poem was . Fabulous` job, lovee .
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Very well written. great job exprssing urself. keep it up. xx

Nice poem

WOW.....GREAT POEM! IT WAS BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN. WHAT A LUCKY GIRL:-) PLEASE WRITE MORE, I WOULD LOVE TO READ THEM. GREAT EMOTION

XOX TIFF

OMG!!! Sooo great. U'r a great writer

Darien - this is a beautiful piece written so perfectly from the heart! Man, I've missed your poetry

Superb write my friend!!

Wow...very nice!!! i can tell it is straight from the heart!! keep writing!
kayla

To be brutally honest, this didn't appeal to me as much as some of your other work. I'm more into the form of the pencil-maze poem (or abstract poem, to put it quaintly), so I prefer a more cryptic approach. Still, that's not to say it was bad, because it was still emotional, and really got the point through, and at the end of the day, that's what poetry's all about, ne?

Nice job. Read beautifully and came straight from your heart. 5/5.

Aww.. that is such a sweet and beautifully written poem. I loved all of it. The flow and rhythm was really good and held up very well. And I absolutely love the adorable story you had going on in it. Great job on this! You definitely are a very talented poet! Keep it up & take care! 5/5

Awhhh, that was so sweett Darienn. The flow was good as were the descriptions. The emotion was strong too and I loved the story in it. The only thing that could have been improved was the use of "I, she, you, etc." But other than that, nice job. 5/5