by Italian Stallion Nov 9, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
Passion within |
Great poem the flow was awesome and you cut off the "passion within" beginning of the stanza at exactly the right time anymore and it would have been annoying so to speak, any less and i would be disappointed. all in all 5/5 |
*sighs* passion and love,,,,,, ah what a wonderful thing :) he he whos it about :) |
Well I'm not a very big fan of your flow.. But the emotion, rhyming, theme.. made up for it. The easy was to fix the flow is make sure each line beats together.. for example |
by Abu3li
Passion within |
by CODACHROME
I love this peom I can never really get Love poems quite right so I prefer to rite lost love ones as there right in my elament gr8 job 5/5 |