Nice try, but your imagery is somewhat lost and buried, the flow is sadly lacking.

I liked it. It's very interesting in its own way and I totally love it. Very well written and full of descriptions or whatever. 5/5 =]
Much Love,
Rayne xx

PS You only wrote that in 10 mins?? It's awesome.

Ok, hey lol I'm actually on MY account thing now so like... it doesnt seem as weird but anyways great poem. 5/5 =] I still can't believe you wrote that in 10 mins... that's like pro.
Much Love,
Rayne xx

You're certainly right about it being nowhere near good, for it has far surpassed that meagre word. And for the second time today, I am left speechless by your immense talent. 5 from me, it was brilliantly done, as usual.

Hm...I like. For something you cooked up in 10 minutes it was pretty good. (a lot of my poems are spurs of the moments)
I liked it tho. Creative. What a wonderful picture. And...hehe...reminds me to never have dinner at Dracula's house and stay late. haha!
infinite/5

~*Katie*~

I enjoyed reading this actually. Got a little lost though...but good for something you wrote in 10 minutes