Extreme

by Alvin Laberinto eNigmaa   Nov 9, 2006


I'd never think twice,
About holding you close.
I'd never feel this way,
About taking off your clothes.

You're my bird,
That I've set free.
You're all my life,
And where I'd want to be.

I can't stand it,
Seeing you with him.
It was just as if,
You were tearing off my limb.

I wish to kill the boy,
That stranger in your life.
I would rather choke him.
Than stab him with a knife.....

© Fusion Shocker 06-07

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  • 16 years ago

    by EmOToMbOy13

    Not bad. good job

  • 17 years ago

    by Ichigo

    Awesome poem Alvin.

  • 17 years ago

    by Stacey

    Even tho i write very short poems too, and this may be hypocracy, i think that you need to keep the same amount of lines but extend how many words are on each line. it just seems that youre not getting enough detail into it. I know its hard when you need a new idea for each stanza and you dont want to introduce a new idea, so the work-around is adding more words. :)

    also, perhaps you could make your rhymes a little more sophisticated.

    overall though, i liked your ideas in the poem, and it was mostly well written. Well done, and keep writing! :):)

  • That was great. I loved it.

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