5/5.. very good. I don't think there needs to be any changes. It sounds awesome!

This poem has excellent flow and content

Definately 5/5.. I have Cherokee i my blood so i can really connect with that =] awesome.. dont change it and keep up the writing.

"The soil that they unrighteously took
they are cold ruthless crooks." you need a comma after took and capitalize they in the next line.

"I will find a place to grow older,
build a shelter so I won't get colder.
Oklahoma is my new home,
I have no place else to go." what happened to the rhyming patern. if u can get that to rhyme that would be cool, if not then its fine.

I really liked it, i stink at the rhyming poems, and i always enjoy readin poems by those who can rhyme

I loved it!! its amazing you are a really talented writer and i love your work please keep writing its a pleasure to read your work..
-sda-

Hey,i really liked this poem! it had good imagery and word choice was great! although these lines "This route cannot go on forever
My mind and heart pray for something better" as well as the others, it works! i also like the combination of 6 lined stanza and then 3 quatrains was different, and it also worked! i loved it! 4/5** lots of lovings, kayla

I really enjoyed this poem. You did a excellent job!

This was beautiful..
The wording was excellent, the imagery a pleasure to read.
I thought the flow worked very well.

This poem is amazing and honestly is one of the most unique and creative poems I have read on this site. Thank you for posting this and bringing a new idea and concept into our little poetry world. 5/5, great job!

~jas~

I paid no attention in class so don't know what this is about lol but it was good nonetheless. Poetically it was great, sorry I can't say much more about it...Keep writing.

Hey i thought this poem was really good! great imagery in there, and great rhyming with a good flow.. 5/5 :)

This poem makes you think:
The white men took all my worth,
they ravaged this land and all the earth.
If I am the savage then what are they?
Will my people still fall to them as prey?

There are sooo many stupid mistakes that America has made. It's hypocrisy to me. I have a poem called Exclusion. It's really not that good, but I was bored, and I watched a video on it. It would be nice if you could check it out and tell me what you think. Most of it is factual more than emotional, I think. I haven't read it in so long.

It's sad... but good! It's amazing how you were able to rhyme everything so easily.

if u can, plz read 'To Be Free'... it's primarily about the Holocaust, but also about captivity.

Thanks

This is a very beautiful poem. It had a very unique topic, I don't believe I've ever read a poem about The Trail of Tears. It flow nicely and the rhyming was good. Keep up the wonderful writing. *5/5*

Alyson

The white men took all my worth,
they ravaged this land and all the earth.
If I am the savage then what are they?
Will my people still fall to them as prey?

The most profound words of the whole poem. In the past and now, that stanza can be applied to life. Beautiful words, wonderful job. You well deserved the win in that contest.