The mirror

by AnnMarie   Nov 9, 2006


I look into the mirror,
and I hate what it is I see.
A woman molded and crumpled,
To do what the world wants of me.

It takes out bits and pieces here,
memories and emotions there.
Soon all that is left of me,
are memories I can not longer bear.

I look into that mirror,
and at the reflection with spiteful eyes,
no longer the woman I once was
but only a person full of lies.

There are knicks and bruises,
unseen to the naked eye.
But just as painful,
as a swollen stye.

I look into the mirror,
and I hate what it is I see.
A woman molded and crumpled,
to do what the world wants of me.

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  • 17 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    I liked this.. The repitition was great. The flow was really good.

    I look into that mirror,
    and at the reflection with spiteful eyes,
    no longer the woman I once was
    but only a person full of lies.

    ^ This stanza REALLY stood out to me. Frankly, I don't know why.. I just think it was the best.

    But just as painful,
    as a swollen stye.

    ^ Honestly, I wasn't too fond of this stanza.. I think that 'stye' seemed a bit forced. & you just had trouble fitting something that would rhyme in with that.. so you used that. I just think you could of thought of something better. Cos obviously you have the talent. :]

    Overall, beautiful.

    Bri [x]

  • 17 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Wow, this is amazing, the peices of your poem each express themselves so strongly, and fit together so well,
    5.0
    x

  • 18 years ago

    by SCARECROW

    Nice rhyme scheme, and I like how you started and ended with the same stanza. Awesome poem, 5 from me. Well done!

  • 18 years ago

    by -Usmi-

    I rele liked this ... uve expressed ur emotions in a wonderfull way...
    keep it on

  • 18 years ago

    by katie!

    I liked this poem, you wrote well about a big issue. The descriptions were good and the emotions were raw and untainted.

    "as a swollen stye" Theres something really off about that line. I don't know. Perhaps its the description, but it really jerked me out of the poem.

    I think you used too many full stops which made the flow interrupted, it would work better without any full stops, in my opinion.

    Overall a strong write, well done

    Keep writing
    XXXXXXXXXXXXXX

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