Tis pretty good. Maybe make 'em a little longer. Add more story to it. Such as:

She looks in the mirror...
What does she see?
A girl with no love,
alone she must be.

She only wants,
A few little things.
To live and laugh,
and even to sing.

But all that's going,
is sadness and strife.
All she wants,
is a better life.

Pulling out a blade,
she cuts her wrist.
Spreads blood on the mirror,
And clenches her fist.

NEW PART!!

On the mirror,
she wrote a letter.
"I couldn't live this life,
I think Death is better."

Back to Poem:

She's dying inside.
She wants one love.
She thinks this as,
She drifts up above.

Her world is fading,
with her last breath,
she simply whispers,
"Here comes Death."

See, add a little structure and a little more rhymes and you got it! If you like this 'new part' go ahead and put it in. Put it all in if you like, I'm only here to help.

5/5

Hey i like this poem its very good.

I like this poem its got feeling and meaning and i liked it