Really good...
I can't figure out what to say more than excellent
take care-xxxx-

Wow sis!! amazing work!!! this is sooo amazing!! ur writting has improved!!(didnt think that was possible u could ever get any better:)
i am so sry u r one of the many who feel this is the only way out. babe u BEAUTFUL!! please see what i c!! u dont need mia!! u r better than her! nevr forget it!!!!

10/5
:)

Sabrina, Long time no talk, How are you keeping? From this poem not so great, Sorry to hear that.

Your poem was good, and it was a hard theme to tackle, I felt for the speaker, which, I assume, was you? And I could empathise with the situation. Poetically, I had a couple of issues with the flow, So I hope you don't mind me going through them.

"I kneel beside my alter
And say a little prayer
Feels just like the first time
I ever got down and knelt there
^This stanza really sets the form and rhythm you want to use. The last line, however, disrupted the rhythm, I think it was too long which jolted me out of the reading a bit. My suggestion would be "I ever knelt down there" It keeps the meaning and fits in.

I pray while tears rolls down
I feel so sick again today
I hate having these feelings
I hate that I'm waisting away
^ Tiny typo "wasting" one too many "i's"

Oh please God forgive my sins
And for what I'm about to do
I know what I do is wrong
And I really want to do right for you
^A couple of flow issues again. The "And" in the second line you could remove, and the last line needs to be shortened otherwise it really stands out.

I finish my prayer with amen
I feel so damn guilty within
Kneeling beside my bathroom alter
Preparing to do my daily sin
^The last line is slightly off, it needs to lose a syllable, "Preparing to commit my sin" would work, but its down to you.

Two fingers down my throat
I feel how my stomach burn now
I really want to stop what I'm doing
But God I just don't know how
^Line 2 missed needs to be "burns"
Line 3 needs to lose a sylable "I want to stop what I am doing"? and the last line would be better without the "just"

I don't remember how it started
But I got addicted to my ED
It has taken over my life
And a demon has taken over me
^The second line needs to lose a couple of syllables, I'm not sure how you could do it. Perhaps "But I'm a slave to my ED"? The last line would do better as "A demon's taken over me" with a comma at the end of the line above.

Later I will kneel here again
Though I promised myself not to
But I have lost all control now
So this is all I ever do
^I think if you added a "my" to make "all my control" it would fit better.

A good poem, well done, I hope my suggestions are helpful. Take care and keep writing.
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Don't give up girl, ur one sweet lady, mark my words 4 that...will be writing 2 u soon, n I'm hoping that ur alright, I'll always be here, remember that...

Wow this is amazing hun, i miss your poems your on my faves list still! if you ever need to talk i'm always here to listen, i know what your going through..
xoxo hayley

Sis! u can do it!! u dont need ras for ur support clintch! u can make it on ur own and u will find someone who will treat u the same...just better!! itll be better bc ull love him and c him in the future! trust me!! have faith sis!!
ps...
someone keeps giving me all 1/5 on my poems
:(
why r people so hurtful??
they rated "decide" a 1/5

Yikes. You really got the topic down. The only problems I found were:

I pray while tears rolls down
*** roll*
And I really want to do right for you
*** too long try it without and.

Other than that, your rhyming, beat, vocab, and flow where amazing. You did a great job!

5/5

:0 omg this poem is amazing. I wish mine were half as good

...wow...deep....amazing.
i love it