This Poem Is SO Tru. Seriously.......... Karma Bites U In The As..s Sometimes. 5/5

This is my favourite of yours. I really connected with the emotion expressed here.

"But alas if I were to show you this today,
You would take it as a joke and throw it gently away,
You do not care for my happiness or love at all,
You seek power in all my life and you are quite likely to fall."

This stanza was definitely my favourite. Good work.

I really liked the ending to that.

But alas if I were to show you this today,
You would take it as a joke and throw it gently away,
You do not care for my happiness or love at all,
You seek power in all my life and you are quite likely to fall.

The law of karma in the world is true,
What goes up surely will fall,
And that flying lie is you.

^^ I like that. A lot.

The ending was a bit... uhh.. shaky? I'm not sure, but the ending made up for it, big time.
I loved it. :) great ending, hun.

Overall I liked the poem a lot.

4.7/5

The end made me laugh! Haha, good poem. However, it didn't flow quite well because some of the rhyming was a little off. Other than that, the subject was a good one. 4/5

Karma-What comes around goes around. People should think twice they never do. Good job. The only thing you might want to look at is your rhyming. It through me off a couple times.

Keep it up.

>black&&blue

This poem reflects very eloquently a specific example of the law of karma

This poem reflects very eloquently a specific example of the law of karma

Ouch.. harsh poem.. but definilty your best becuase the emotion is there and its strong.. the flow is good as well as the rhyme.. the last stanza is weird because its not the same length as the others but its a great ending.. nice job with this one

Poem is definatly truthful when it comes down to it. i really enjoy how you captivate the reader by sort of telling a story while still sticking to the rules of poetry, excellent read! 5/5

I really liked the last verse of this poem. it was written with alot of emotion. well done bub

much love and many kisses,
bex

This is great... excellent job
Leona