Okay, the flow was way off, but I did really like the poem. It rhymed very well, but it just lacked the flow...so if you worked on that, this would def. be one of the better poems on the site. Really! Here's one suggestion for a stanza. Btw this is all to help you grow, not to criticize in a bad way!
When she walked she was so beautiful
and left people in awe
her smile was that of a movie-star
she was the most beautiful thing anyone ever saw
My suggestion:
She walked so beautifully
Leaving all she passed in awe
Smiling like a movie-star
Without one single flaw

Hope it helps you with more ideas!
Charisma*

I agree with the other comment great rhyming, great emotion just needs work on the flow