Secretly loving you

by ~*×FaÐ3D‡‡M€mØ®Ïê§×*~   Nov 12, 2006


Ive never felt this way before,
especially about a friend,
but the feelings i have are very strong,
and never seem to end,

Ive felt this way for ages now,
but never said a thing,
because i have a boyfriend,
and you have your little fling,

we would never be accepted,
thats why i want you so bad,
why do we always yearn,
the things we've never had?

i just need a taste of your lips,
and a kiss of that sweet smile,
to be with you forever,
and to have you hold me for a while,

just us being together,
would really make me beam,
but of course it couldn't happen,
it would only be a dream

so ill go on by another day,
just being your faithful friend,
but deep down inside my feelings are strong,
and they will NEVER end!!!

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  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I really liked this poem. It is very good. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Dacey Flame

    Awww. Thats adorable XP. Always follow your heart. And if its true, tell me how it turns out. It's an interesting predicament. I'de love to hear about it. Only thing, the beat sound a big rough in spots to me. Read the whole thing out loud and maybe tweak a few of the words. But I don't know, it may just me.
    ~Kristina

  • 18 years ago

    by Letty

    This is a very beautiful poem. The flow was lovely, the emotion was there, and the rhyming was ok. I only found one error and that was in grammer. You should always capitilize indivisual I's (I). I found nothing else to interfere with my reading of your poem. In this poem you conveyed a beautiful message of a friend madly in love with another friend. The picture was painted clearly and I thank you for sharing your wonderful talent with me. 5/5. Keep up the magnificent work!

    Best wishes
    Letty

    P.S. I am sorry that it took me so long to getting back with you for the two poems of mine that you commented on, I was only suppose to do four of yours, but since it has taken me awhile I will do five.

  • 18 years ago

    by emmerz

    This was a really good poem! it had some bumpy spots, but overall was well done. i can really relate to this right now (written a few poems on it haha), so its nice to know that there are other people writing about this.

    why do we always yearn,
    the things we've never had?

    i really like that part, its very truthful and nice

    the flow could have been patched up in some places, and the "beam/ dream" rhyme seemed a little too forced....
    but overall it was a good poem! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Sweet poem. Very meaningful..very cute. Loved the third stanza. keep it up && take care!

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