Good writing, i like the part,
why do we always yearn,
the things we've never had?
good job!

Sweet poem. Very meaningful..very cute. Loved the third stanza. keep it up && take care!

This was a really good poem! it had some bumpy spots, but overall was well done. i can really relate to this right now (written a few poems on it haha), so its nice to know that there are other people writing about this.

why do we always yearn,
the things we've never had?

i really like that part, its very truthful and nice

the flow could have been patched up in some places, and the "beam/ dream" rhyme seemed a little too forced....
but overall it was a good poem! 5/5

This is a very beautiful poem. The flow was lovely, the emotion was there, and the rhyming was ok. I only found one error and that was in grammer. You should always capitilize indivisual I's (I). I found nothing else to interfere with my reading of your poem. In this poem you conveyed a beautiful message of a friend madly in love with another friend. The picture was painted clearly and I thank you for sharing your wonderful talent with me. 5/5. Keep up the magnificent work!

Best wishes
Letty

P.S. I am sorry that it took me so long to getting back with you for the two poems of mine that you commented on, I was only suppose to do four of yours, but since it has taken me awhile I will do five.

Awww. Thats adorable XP. Always follow your heart. And if its true, tell me how it turns out. It's an interesting predicament. I'de love to hear about it. Only thing, the beat sound a big rough in spots to me. Read the whole thing out loud and maybe tweak a few of the words. But I don't know, it may just me.
~Kristina

I really liked this poem. It is very good. 5/5