I too am trying different forms of poetry...I haven't written this one yet, but my only suggestion is that if there is a word other than ROUGH that rhymes and sounds good, use it, because honestly rough sounds a little, cheesy. LOL And thanks for your comment on my Labels Set Free poem. That's why I told everyone to read on b/c it's not what you think. I was totally against labeling, I was just showing everyone what it sounds like. Thanks again! Glad it made you think. That was the point!
Charisma*