by Midnight Sun
I do like this one a lot too, but one suggestion that I have is after you talk about wild horses you should use something a little more .... sophisticated I guess. Cause when I read that first line it sounded really beautiful but then I just saw 'run and play' and it seemed a little childish. Then again you might of wanted that if all you wanted to convey was more of a crush then love. Either way I loved your poem once again, keep it up! = ) |
by Gem
"I like you like the grey moon |