Original paragraph:
Suddenly Liriel was pulled from her body. There was a moment�s bright, white pain, and a quick wenching as she was torn from the mortal world, and then�
Liriel had glimpsed the abyss, had viewed all the lower planes through the scrying portals common among the priestesses of Lolth. The grey, mist filled landscape before her was like nothing she had ever seen or, more precicelyprecisely she had ever felt. There was little to be seen here, yet all around her she felt the invisible passages that lead to untold realms. The drow sent out her thoughts, seeking the sea elves spirits.
Plagiarism poem:
Torn
Suddenly, pain
Bright, white
And then�
Grey
She felt invisible
Her thoughts seeking
The mortal world
There was little to be seen
Mist.
Love it, love it, love it lol
Simple yet truly powerful piece. You picked the right words to describe the ambient and emotions and this is truly captivating and vivid. I wish it was longer because I really enjoyed but you should leave it as it is, cause the fact that you managed to say so much within such short piece is impressive. Also, I like the flow and rhythm of this piece a lot.
Keep up!