Heyy! Nice poem... I really liked it! It's really well written...awesome! It's a 5/5 for sure!
*Just Lisa*

Nice job. Your first stanza was the strongest. There was quite a bit of repetition of the word choice. Your last stanza was beautiful. Check your last line of the first stanza. Keep it up

I hate to be negative but I didn't like it. You had a few spelling errors such as "my please" There were too many word repetitions for it to be clear. The message was there, but it was a chore finding it.