Lustful Eyes

Wow, Hun. This was so amazing. I've never heard of this style.. But i'm deffinitley going to have to try it. It flowed so well & the choice of words were excellent. The repitition of that line.. Really brought the poem together, you couldn't have chose better words for that. :]

Lustful eyes scan the night.
Thy tender innocence on display,
Jealous hearts about to break,
as it's only my lovers name I shall say.

^ Deffinitley my favorite stanza.. So beatuiful. The imagery in this poem is amazing.

Beautifully penned, babe.

Bri [x]

I didn't know anything about that style but i liked it,the flow and wording were great but one thing confused me.what is 'thy' in the first stanza second line
Other than that well done
Keep it up

Wow. very very nicely done. good job you! yes, the "lustful eyes scan the night" is quite eye catching. my fav stanza would have to be "Lustful eyes scan the night.
Thy tender innocence on display,
Jealous hearts about to break,
as it's only my lovers name I shall say"

well done. =]

That was beautiful, it flowed together perfectly, it really is just like a picture
"Lustful eyes scan the night.
Thy tender innocence on display,
Jealous hearts about to break,
as it's only my lovers name I shall say"
it was so sweet,
beautiful

I am not anyone to know the forms of poetry. I loved this it was really beautiful! Great job! Take Care Cindy