by *Charisma* Nov 14, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Edge of the beach, sun going down |
Wow.. your soo creative.. the last line in this poem is killer.. and overall this poem is just super!! hehe lol i lovelovelove it.. the rhyming and flow is amazing.. yet again.. lol.. im sure youve heard this before but you have a ridiculous amount of talent |
by Keath
Beautiful poem. I like the short lines, rhyming and the metaphors. Somewhere the rhythm lost its track but you pick it up later. And I really love the last sentence. 5/5 |
by Gem
"Behind the money and neon lights |