by ray the emo i am Nov 14, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Why must you leave I think of you. |
by jaimie
Oh hun i remember that story im so sorry i know that was so hard for you. |
Wow, very emotional peice you have written. I will however state again, the structure is not good, perhaps break it into stanzas. The Flow was good. The choice of words where also good. It was very long, maybe break it into two poems, or cut it back. Other than that is was very well written. Great Job. |
Im sorry about your disceased freind, |
Wow Ray. Thats so...wow. Strong. Idk wht to say. It's amazing. *hugs* dont forget im here for you. And i'll support you no matter what. |