by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex Nov 14, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
sensual love
Take this heart now carved from stone, |
Aww it's sad, but cute. I know that must be hard to understand, but that was how I saw it. |
by SCARECROW
Mostly, I loved how you repeated the first two lines again at the end. It made this already lovely poem so much stronger, so much more effective than it already was. One small criticism to make, I don't know if you've noticed, but you seem to have mis-spelt cherish. Other than that, it's a beautiful poem, and I'm glad I saw your discussion post and read it. |