by Alissa
Wow, that was really unexpected. Wow, I'm still shocked it was really amazing. WOAH...lol that was awesome. I have nothing to say, great work!! |
by xxxStarSxxx
W-O-W! wow. That was amazing! Beautiful! Wonderful! and oh-so heart-filled! I loved it. the only thing that kinda messed me up was this line: |
by VYXSIN
Omg that is such a sad poem! it was really powerful and touching, i really like it. |
An excellent read! i really liked the way all the stanza's ended with a question. It makes the poem a really worthwhile read! It has an awesome style and great flow! Keep it up! xx |
by SCARECROW
Love it, especially your use of parallel structure. (Feck, I sound like my english teacher *shudders*). Either way, it's a lovely poem, and it's utterly wonderful how you convey so many emotions so easily. Beautifully written, and I'm glad to have had the privilege of reading it. |
by SCARECROW
Wait, is it parallel structure or repetition? Repetition, isn't it? Haha, gosh, talk about an I-no-speak-engrish mistake. |
by Anonymous
Hm, well, as long as it's true feelings, then it's fine. I haven't read a poem like this, but it's pretty good. Each of the lines pertains to the question following. It's so emotional, too... :'[ |
by Mousie
Wow there was a great twist at the end, i liked it! beautiful poem, maybe next time put in a little more emotion though, let the reader deeper in your thoughts. nice job 5/5 |
by Kaylalala
Wow that was really strong and i liked it a lot! 5/5 |
by Kaylalala
Hey sry didnt realize til i wrote the comment that like everyone else said WOW but just lets you know it was super delicious! |
by Jenni Marie
I wasn't expecting that ending, that came as a surprise. |
by UnToLd TrUtH
I really like this one. You put alot of your feelings into for a short poem. Keep it up! 5/5 |
by Stephanie
*tears* Wow, I can relate to this greatly. This poem makes me think of my real dad whom I haven't talked to in many years, it brings back all those old memories that I do remember of him. A very sad poem indeed for me to read. You're a fantastic writer, keep it up. 5/5 |
Omg...i can totally relate to this...i think the exact same things every day...excellent job writing these feelings down...5/5. |
Overall very sad. but i was thrown off a bit by the ending, i guess you wanted ti to end on a different note. bbut the poem is titled Do /you/.. But it was sad.. what ever happned im truly sorry. it flowed very vell-especially for a freeverse. |
Wow . I didn`t expect the end . |
by Brook
Awe this is really good, but really sad. you can feel your emotions coming through. |
by Bridgette
I loved this poem. The questions at the end of each stanza had a really nice effect on the poem. I think that it was very well thougth out. And although it was short, it held so much emotion in it. I don't think you should change anything in this. The flow and rhtyhm was really good and the questions fit with each stanza and added on to the sadness within the poem. You did an amazing job on this! 5/5 |
by Mark
This was a well written poem but this stanza needs to be changed: |
by Jessica
This was good but very simple. I felt that more detail was needed for it to be better. In some cases simplicity works but I feel here it didnt. Try adding more details and more emotion and it will be a better poem. Nice job though 4/5 |