Great poem, and all to real for some 5/5 u should check out a few of my poems along these lines i believe you will enjoy them keep it up

Great title. You've got a good start. The only problem is that your rhymes were simple and sounded forced. You could cover that up by either not using rhymes...or using a lot of metaphoric descriptions. Keep it up

I'll do the rest of you poems later..shhh, my dad's yelling..lol

Wow, i like this poem alot, you have done a great job

Awwww. I can relate to this poem a great deal. It's like im looking at myself. I know how you feel. And I have come to see. what ppl say does not matter. You are you. and you are beautiful in your own way. Don't worrry about what ppl say. You are not living for them. you are in fact living for you though. Be strong sweetie. This was amazing! i loved it!

Aww Hun that's so sad, people can be so harsh at times but You need to ignore what they say.. You're absolutely stunning and i'm guessing they are jealous of You.. Very well written as always 5/5 xx mmwwahh

Eating disorders are the worst thing, especially when one person goes from being overweight to anorexic. I knew a guy that went through this, it was awful to watch, and there was nothing I could do or say to make it better for him.
Only suggestion I have is on the first line of the second stanza, it should be "joke's" because you're saying joke is. Thanks for sharing.

Aww.. this is such a sad poem. I hope that you didn't really go through this.. but if you did I hope that you are better and you shouldn't let people bring you down like that :) But the poem was really good and held alot of emotion.. The flow was really good and the rhyming really held up well also. You did an amazing job on this! Keep it up! 5/5

"So look at me now
Before I demise
You'll see what you've caused
With you words so 'wise'."

A fitting ending.
I think every girl in the world, no matter what size they are will be able to relate to this poem.
It's so sad to think that girls everywhere are letting thier self esteem get trodden on by the spiteful comments of others.
Fabulous poem
5/5
*Gem*

Great poem well done :) 5/5

Really good..so sad..i know exactly how ya feel..email me at bennetta@bamberg1.com if u ever wanna talk..5/5
!amanda!

Wow that was really good.. despite how sad it was. it's such a good description of what a lot of people face, and I like how you made it so personal.
5/5 for sure :)
♥Robin

Very good poem. I'm sure that a lot of people could relate to this peom. I liked it.5/5

I wish this never happened. i hope that no guys would ever do this.

this is a great poem. this trully is. i voted and gave you a 5. good work.

i would never ever treat someone as badly as what the guy in your poem does.

you expressed yourself well. ill read more def!

david

I think we can all relate to this poem at one point in all of our lives. I was once a bit over weight myself not going to lie =/ and i pushed passed that and look great now only because i was made fun of and had so much to prove! i love it! =)