I think you are trying to make too many points with one poem and its sort of confusing at the start. Maybe if you go back and look at it again it could be improved more. keep trying

Mimi, thanks for the criticism...I appreciate your honesty, but I am not sure exactly what you mean. Can you explain? Thanks Captive, I really appreciate the praise! :)

Wow this one was great im glad i read this one too great job loved the last stanza as well as all the others
"So the king and the boy ruled together from then on
They shared a kingdom that was healthy and strong
And the people lived happily, and songs they did sing
About a Fool who told tales of a boy and a king"
lovely

Great poem, read the whole thing. I know that took a lot of thought and time. Sometimes we're so blind about our selfishness that we can hurt others.