Through my reflection

"The moonlight shines clearly bright
as the sparkles in my eyes show past memories that flash before me"

That's an absolutely beautiful line and the conclusion of this poem is great and really finalizes the meaning.

~jas~

Aww. I like it. ^_^ Especially since it's about friendships and staying close to one another. It's kinna mushy, but everyone needs mushyness at one point in time. =P

The flow was really good near the ending, I thought. But near the beginning it seemed a little rocky. Again, don't force your rhymes and your lines. If you don't have enough room in the line as it is, try fitting in something else. Keep writing, you're doing great. =) 5/5 xxoo

Samantha

Mmm, good, it's okay, a little carelessly written, could have used more emotion.
but it was okay, i did enjoy it.
x

This was really good! I knew I would like it as soon as I read the first stanza. A very great way to describe a relationship with somebody, whether than be a friend, relative, boyfriend, etc. Very, very good.

I sense varying emotion in this poem...I feel both love for the one you sit with, and hate for those who have forsaken you in the first stanza, and then depression and opression in the second stanza, and then you end about your friend bringing out the best in you...interesting ending. It got me to thinking. A boyfriend or best friend or close relative? Good open ending that made me think about your poem.

Also there was really good imagery in this...I pictured a girl staring out a window into a dark night with the moon and stars shining, and reflecting off the glass.

Good job :)