For Someone Special

by Spikie   Nov 16, 2006


Poem for someone very special.

I want to know
If you'll let me show
How much you mean to me,
and show you i can be
everything you desire.

I'll light your fire,
and treat you right,
and let you win our fights.

I want to be good to you,
and i promise to do
all that you want me to.

So, will you be with me?

So please tell me what you think of this poem.... and please tell me the truth about it.... please no lying.....

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  • 18 years ago

    by Crystal Redl

    Yeah to agree with DarkPrincess good start but your rythmes really do sound too basic keep trying from crystal

  • 18 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Good start. I would suggest that you start out with no rhymes. No offense~ but your rhymes right now sound forced and too basic. Try to concentrate on your senses.
    "Give me the chance my love
    for me to open my wide wings
    and embrace you within the home
    of my desire and roaring joy"

    Cute Poem though, Keep it up

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