Good start. I would suggest that you start out with no rhymes. No offense~ but your rhymes right now sound forced and too basic. Try to concentrate on your senses.
"Give me the chance my love
for me to open my wide wings
and embrace you within the home
of my desire and roaring joy"

Cute Poem though, Keep it up

Yeah to agree with DarkPrincess good start but your rythmes really do sound too basic keep trying from crystal