Gloom of the soul

by Brittany C   Nov 16, 2006


A leaf shutters,
As you pass below,
Reminding you,
Of better times,
Of happy times,

That are now gone,
And may never come again,
As the impending doom,
Presses down,
On your meager soul,

In a blink of an eye,
The grasses turns brown,
All around you,

As the gloom,
drops its cold curtains,
Around your world,
As a lone crow flies high above.

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  • 17 years ago

    by KeyxMashingxParody

    Very strong, loved the flow, the work was very good. 5/5 babe.

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Some part os this was a little hard to follow, bnut that could just be me. I like the use of the crow again. and even though there are a few spelling errors, I think you did a good job. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow I loved all the metaphores in this poem it was wonderful to read a poem that was straigh to the point like most poems on here are. the last stanza was definatly my favorite the image of a crow always makes me think of gloom that isnt weak in any way but isnt a huge focus. well done. This is definatly one of my favorite and if you dont mind I'm going to add it to a book I have with all my favorite poems.. dont wrry I will give you credit for writing it.

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    Very nice word choice!! I really enjoyed reading this poem!

  • 17 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    This poem reminds me of a dark alley and the crow really set the scene. Isnt it weird the way we associate certain withs with different atmospheres lol anyways good write well done.

    xxx alex xxx

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