Hahahaha, this made me smile.
I liked the rhyme scheme and imagery and I enjoyed the flow.

I also liked the theme as it was original.

I think you did a very good job.

Hehe, i HAVE to tell this to my little cousins. See if i can get them to be good when i'm babysitting them. =)
Great poem!
5/5
*Gem*

Haha... thats kinda funny.

Ummmm...it was good but for some reason i didnt get it???(^_^)

Hahaha cute poem♥

-bRiAnNa♥

I guess I just prefer the original. This didn't make much sense...I think it could have been a lot better. But keep trying out different ideas. Feedback like the ones your getting one of the ways to help you grow.
Charisma*