Another great poem hun. The flow was good but this time I felt you could have added more detail in as it felt a little bland. But maybe that is just me. The storyline was good and I liked the title. Nicely done 5/5

Awesome Darien!

"Your mouth is the perfect bullseye
Speak slowly with no hesitations
Only one word can decide your fate
So please remember to enunciate"
^^^ Love this stanza, excellent wording!
And the end was incredible, very powerful! Great piece!

D...this was very well written. From start to finish the reader's attention is captured. This was a sad poem that gives faint hope that all strife cuased can be easily dismissed with one word. SORRY. Flow was great and the sentiment was really strong.

Wow#!!! this is such a fantastic piece! you clearly portryed your feelings; the hatred, the anger, the sadness. you wrote it so well! i felt as if i was the person who had to decide what to say. it was amazing.. i fell completly into the poem from the star, the flow was good too. you are truley talented.. i hope that you can give me some advice on some of my poems. take care and keep writing...
Love Kirsty xx

Damn Dairen....so inspiring and mysterious, sad and tragic, I love the hate...!!

This poem is amazing! Its great...

-Sarah

Wow, thats amazing. What happened?

I loved your poem it is very interesting to me. It reminds me of a dark, cold shiverus moment I had in a relationship. I love your mind and how it recumulates emotions.

Pretty good, i applaud you. It's very moving and pulls the reader into it. It just shows how dumb and stubborn people can really be. And its funny the first line reminds me of a song i never finished. The main line was.

"I'll take this gun, and ill take your hand. Lets have some fun, with one last stand."

For some reason this poem reminded me of fight club. What a great film.
And what a great poem.
The title attracted me to it (which makes me wonder why ;) And you had a very strong opening line.
The rest of the poem followed suit in a fab fashion with a thought provoking ending
Great work
5/5
*Gem*

Great poem. It is easy to read and has a great flow to it. It is also easy to relate to. keep up the good work.5/5

Cool. I'd like to read that.

Great poem it has strong emotions i like the ABCC pattern im a big fan of that well keep up the good work

Very indepth ..so much imagery

The title works very well with this poem. And I LOVE the poem. Again, the creativity can be clearly seen. A few of the rhymes seem forced, but they still seem to work. The flow is very good, and the meaning is clear. 5/5.

Wow!!! You really do have a way with words. This is a very, very, wonderful poem. I was pulled into it from the begining and held captive until the end. My favorite stanza was the last one:

One word can save your pathetic life
One shot can end it all in an instant
A long overdue showdown ends today
So which word will you choose to say?

I really loved it . I didn't see anything that I would suggest you change. Keep up the great work. 5/5

Best wishes
Letty

Good poem, i didn't like the rhyme scheme though. but i did like the poem, nice job

I LOVED it.
This is one of my favourite's of your's.
I liked how you got the idea from a novel as well.

You know, I'm not really sure what it is about this poem, I can't really put my finger on it, but I love it. And I love how you ended it, it really gave it that extra, I guess drama is the word I'm looking for. But anyways, great poem, and love all your work. 5/5