Zombies

by livingxlifesxnightmare616   Nov 16, 2006


I have a strange imagination
I dream about zombies rising
I think they're a cool fascination
Everyone else i find despising.

Zombies rise from the ground
Tumbling earth
Easy to be found
Gently rising for their rebirth.

Zombies tread over the ground
moving like a mouse
without a sound
searching for a house.

Zombies moaning along the road
brains brains brains
they're looking for a load
hoping that they will gain.

Zombies give someone a scare
grabbing them by the neck
they move like a struggling hare
zombies eat without paying the check.

Someone shoots the zombie in the head.
the zombies panic they try to run
back to the safety of their bed
bang bang goes the gun.

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  • 17 years ago

    by ellewen

    Okay, for a little boy with an imagination this is pretty good. But if you want to be known as more then that I would suggest writing about something that everyone else can relate to. That is the key to attracting an audience. So write upon expeirience, and see what you find. I am a little surpprised at your vocabulary though. I have 3 little brothers, and a little sister (2 are twins) and they are 13, 13, and 11, im nor sure about the other one lol but they are what your poem reminds me of. I do have a couple suggestions though if you are interested?

    "zombies eat without paying the check." I do say, that is a clever line, and kinda funny too, but it just doesnt make sence where you have put it. Well sure it makes sence, but for a good poem you have to try to keep a natural rhythm through the whole thing. Almost like you can sing it and not get off beat. That is the goal. And in order to do that you might want to keep a rhyme through the whole thing. But bravo on the stanza's. Lol it took me a while to even realize what people were talking about when I first got on this site. And The same for the last line. I think that is also off beat. But good job for your efforts and good vocabulary.

  • 17 years ago

    by Crazygirl yeh

    Your getting better

  • 17 years ago

    by Crazygirl yeh

    What do u call that are u gothic or soming bro or are you just saying it dur

  • 17 years ago

    by DarkJem

    Um well it's good but not my sort of thing sorry bro, but don't be discouraged it was only your 1st one.

  • 17 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    Good poem!
    I found the last stanza the best!
    =-)
    Great work

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