I like this poem because it is very visual, which is always a plus. Juts one thing, i think that when you repeat yourself it makes it sound more like a lyric then a poem. But it's still great! I do that to honestly, but I am also a lyric writer for my friends band, lol.
Keep up the good work. P.S. i am holding you to that post.
~skittles

A few things:

"Dark crow"? Are there crows that aren't dark then? I would think "lone" serves you better here.

"a pending doom". How about "impending doom". I can't help but feel this is what you meant anyway.

"from the doom that is to come". How about "from the fate that is to come"? Because you've avoided a repetition and added a quandary: is fate unalterable?

I also think if you replaced "lifeless eyes" with "mocking eyes" you would capture a much more malevolent moment in the tale.

A good effort though. :-)

Although i strongy disagree in the use as a crow for a bad omen.. lol. it was a great poem. i liked the imagery , and the way you described the crow.

*oman-OmEn..

=]

Very nicely written poem, i give you that.......... 5/5 from me.

To be a non rhymed poem it was great, 5/5!!!

Bryan,

"Omen" .. not "Oman"..

It was an ok poem, good detail.. imagery was ok. I'm sure you can write better. Keep trying!

I loved this.

The imagery was fantastic, it blew me away.

My favourite part was the last stanza.

A beuatiful write.

I love this one, i like dark poems

This is dark, and well written. I liked the use of black crow, as a dark future. You did an excellent job on this one. 5/5