by *Charisma*
I entered this contest too! Very good job! |
by Goran Rahim
Wow, i like this poem as well as ur every other poem, great job, 5/5 |
by Jen
Wow i really liked this poem, its great how you actually managed to do it =]=] |
by Nelle
Awwww. I loved this poem. It was in perfect rhythm. I loved the pattern with every. it was very unique! |
by .K.i.T.t.Y.
Thats cool i like it. |
That was very good. It's quite hard to get a really good poem out of having to follow certain rules, but you pulled it off well. |
by Bridgette
I really like this for some reason.. I'm not even sure why because I really don't like repetitive poems. lol. But there's just some thing about this that I really like. For one, the flow was really good and held up very well and your rhyming didn't seem forced either. I also liked the last line... It kind of gives you something to think about...like how everything in your life could come down to this one thing. Amazing job on this.. I really liked it! 5/5 |
by Kristina
Wow great job on this. i really like how you wrote it. so much emotion in this. wonderful job you did. 5/5 |
by Void
Hey. This is my first comment, as you did an excellent job on my contest and I've come to give you what you so honourably earned. I saw that this poem too was written for a contest. Personally, I have a bit of a biased opinion about repitition. I can't say much about it, because as it was done for a contest, it wasn't your idea nor does it show quite what I believe you are capable of. Repitition, for many but not all readers, usually runs on long enough to almost start to get boring. |
by tinna
Hey i hope u won, this poem is excellent! |
by Mousie
Now that was awesome! much better than the other one i read! it had so much more put into it, it gave me a good feeling, that's when i know a poem is good... even though i said all that stuff about elementary vocabulary, there are some poems you can make it work for, and you did a wonderful job of it on this poem... beautifully written, hopefully you have/will win/won something for it! you would deserve it! 5/5 |
Ohhkay I get it lol, I noticed the every thing and didn`t understand it until I read that last footnote there, interesting idea...however, I feel that the lines could have been just a little big more descriptive to help the reader..the ending was a little awkward and sudden too. Don`t get me wrong, it fits in the sense that it leaves it open to the readers interpretation, but at the same time...comes down to what? It leaves the reader a little confused, did me anyways lol. Anywhoozle, I liked the poem, it was a great poem, just a few things felt a little bit off to me. |