It's short and sweet, BUT, no offense~ it's a Common start. Now, try to focus on your senses, add metaphors and abstract imagery.

Try:
"Baby, I love you like the way
The rose sings to the sun
Though I may not know
whether you love me back
Let me write you a poem
So sweet and tender
I'd cross the ocean for you
Even when a summer storm brews
I'd fly around the world
Just for the sake of you....etc

Keep on writing!

Hey* omg i no a guy named nick i 4got his age..but we had great memories together now we just moved on..well he did.. i wasnt ready i didnt even gett to say goobye...