I like this one ... but i think you could get your point across with stronger words and more attudite ... but dont just take my opinion ...

Awwwh, this was so0o sweet.
It was very short, but I think that made it more powerful because of your choice of words in this one.
I loved it.

Awwww very sweet poem about someone you love. it's really beautiful. it flowed nicely together too. nice job! 5/5

~Kristina