It's good i like the way u use the rythming couplets, your favorite word seems to be pawn mines shell when i write poetry :)

You need to edit this one and fix up the spelling. the ' are making the poem have lots of //// in it. makes it hard to read.

but still found this one kinda funny. and that for me is a good thing. i am not easily amused. lol.

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david