FADING AWAY

by Letty   Nov 18, 2006


With each passing moment,
another part of me disappears.
I no longer feel like myself,
as if my person isn't real.

Feeling trapped and confused,
lost in a challenging maze.
Staring in the mirror,
at my ghostly image,
because I am slowly fading
away.

No one seems to here my pleads
or notices my sorry state.
Reaching out to them, I have tried
before, but my hand they just won't
take.

I wish they would just Look at me!

I'm miserable and dying on the inside.
Am I not good enough to save?
Is it my destiny to never live, but die?

I don't think they can even feel
my presence anymore,
when I walk into the room.
They glance in my direction,
but they never see me.
And my heart,
they look right through.

My mind is constantly trying to persuade
me to let it go, and let it be.
But my heart still craves for that feeling of love,
and for someone to notice me.

this is just a first draft. I am not sure if it is worth completing. I would appreciate any comments and/or critique, so that I know if I should complete it or not.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Poetvoices

    I REALLY LOVE THIS ONE! PLEASE continue. I'll feel like a piece of ME is missing, if you don't! lol. I have to agree with Shadowspoet that it'd be cool if it rhymed more, but what you already have is amazing. I think I really connected with this piece. GOING ON MY FAVORITE POEMS! :) We haven't talked in a while, but <3 ya, Letty!
    PV
    P.S. Let me know if/when you get a second part done!

  • 17 years ago

    by Katlynn

    You shouldn't ever stop a poem but you did an amazing job && you should keep writing this because it's amazing && your very talented.

    keep it up. keep on writing. Love always && forever.

  • 17 years ago

    by suda

    Nice poem hun but bit sad again. anyway i love this poem.

    Suda

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I think that this is a great poem. Please do finish it. I believe that it is worth it. It has a great flow and great word choice. Keep up the good work.

    If there is ever a poem you would like me to read just ask:)

  • 18 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    5/5. I think it looks good the way it is. It's very emotional and very discriptive and very much can relate to others. I think you did a great job. Keep it up!

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