I love the metaphors and how they blend to deliver the natural dark feelings we all seem to have at times

"Who fades within my own shadows
Afraid of the raging sun"
these lines bring the meanig all together

I really like this. I'm not sure why.. it's just got a nice flow and rhtyhm to it and it holds so much strength and honesty. I loved the last stanza.. very beautifully written. You did an amazing job on this poem. 5/5 Keep it up!

Child you think, you can deny me?
I will not only eat you from inside,
I will eat your soul, You are mine.
I am Death, you cannot hide.

Fear me child., You will learn soon
You are afraid of only the sun?
You are trapped forever, child.
And the key, I have the only one.

Your braclets are manacles,
Your freedom, a usless lie.
In shadow, we walk hand in hand.
But in my wake, things die.

All you are living for, is doom.
You are living without breath.
You are alive for me, child.
You are nothing, I am Death.

hehe, Great eh? I just made it up. Death talking to you. Nyah nyah, very good Princess, Nice rhyming and vocab. I think i'll add you to my favorites.

Excellent
5/5

Child you think, you can deny me?
I will not only eat you from inside,
I will eat your soul, You are mine.
I am Death, you cannot hide.

Fear me child., You will learn soon
You are afraid of only the sun?
You are trapped forever, child.
And the key, I have the only one.

Your braclets are manacles,
Your freedom, a usless lie.
In shadow, we walk hand in hand.
But in my wake, things die.

All you are living for, is doom.
You are living without breath.
You are alive for me, child.
You are nothing, I am Death.

hehe, Great eh? I just made it up. Death talking to you. Nyah nyah, very good Princess, Nice rhyming and vocab. I think i'll add you to my favorites.

Excellent
5/5

Dark. I like it. Your writing...it's different. A good different. I wish I had the vocabulary that you have. I am working to expand mine. Hehehe.. =]

Nice choice of words. Those stood out the most to me.

5/5

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