My word you write like me. I have poems on my laptop that are so similar to that its scary.

Yes well i'm familiar with the style, its close to my own. Its still refreshing to read though. The form while old still felt new and I think that the line "deadly scars and broken mirrors", set the scene perfectly for me. Even more so because like you've noted on the poem it didn't rhyme to me at all, I couldn't help liking it that way though.

It was dark but not overly which helped it along. The use of the language was interesting in parts yet slightly over the top in others, I can't help but feel it was better off with that over the top feel in places though. Reminded me of a long forgotten actress hamming it up on stage for the slightest moment to catch you off guard and then hitting you with something truly brilliant. I greatly loved the repetition of the "chaotic mind", its placement left me thinking about it afterwards.

Someone said it was moving, I didn't find it moving. I thought it was beautiful and although it makes no difference to anything, I enjoyed it greatly.

I just couldn't help but laugh at the end when I sat down and thought, clearly this poem can't have come from a chaotic mind. Which is the best bit about it, the control shown was as forgiving as the line "a penetrating scream of the insane". The double meanings were very well placed and if by accident then the best luck i've come across.

I don't think it was as emotional as these other people are making it out to be. I thought it was almost detached from emotion, it wouldn't have worked if it was emotional. The irony is I felt the person in question was as in control as the writer, not chaotic at all but prepared and ruthless. Is this about suicide? All the other comments are saying it is but I had visions of a killing spree at the end there definately not suicide.

I wish you luck with your work and urge you not to waste too much of your time on websites like this. It will get your writing nowhere.

So theres my two cents. I'm sure its completely the opposite to everyone elses and totally wrong. Joy of Joys.

Hope you feel i've contributed in anyway, sure I haven't. Oh well, its very late, "Caught from some unhappy master", and all that jazz.

Drusus

I absolutely love this poem...sometimes I wonder if I have a chaotic mind...lol...The flow was perfect and even though I pronounce mirrors diff. than you...it doesn't hurt the poem at all...I'm adding you to my favorites!
Jonda Beth

Wow, that was beautifully written! It flowed really well. So deep & dark. I really enjoyed reading it. Gave me chills, actually. haha. And I absolutely LOVE the title. It definitely fits this poem, as well.. Haha.

Niiice job, hunny.

Bloody cuts, a broken soul,
A Chaotic Mind has no control.
Hysterical screams pierce the silence,
Reality gone, thoughts of violence.

Chaotic mind, no memory,
Only one thought of a remedy.
Lovely gun, you're so kind,
Tragic end of a Chaotic Mind.
Omg these last two stanzas were so effin powerful. I really loved this poem. the word choice was truly amazing, and the emtion were deep, dark, and sort of twisted. Very Very enjoyable read. It held my intrest til the end, I was on the edge of my seat. Man what A wonderful write 10 if I could 5/5

Amazing, one of my favorites

I really liked it, 5/5

This poem is great. the flow and structure work really well.5/5

Wow, another amazing one. I can relate to it. Truly greatly written poem, with excellent choice of words and good flow.
My favorite stanza is:
-Silent screams and unshed tears,
Chaotic thoughts and untold fears.
Secrets hidden throughout the years,
Deadly scars and broken mirrors.-

You created great imagery in it.

Wow, I think WOW. Great poem, you created amazing atmosphere and imagery is great. Emotions are also excellently expressed. Wording of this piece is powerful and this one has haunting rhythm. I like it very much, your work is refreshing. It deserves 5/5

Wow... i terribly amazed... i'm astounded, it feels like you've taken my twisted thoughts and put them in print... i could never get that far... this is amazing

How anyone could rate this poem less than a 5 are crazy!!! these are the best use of words i've read in a LONG time! you're amazing. Great job. :)
thanks
~*~Amber~*~

I believe this poem grasps the true concept and emotional undercurrent of those who have fallen victim to depression. (including myself, thanks for sharing) 5/5