Nice poem,it happened to me.My dad left

Mmm ,let me see , very long one , and if you want advice,
the reader fear teh long tall paragraph , the topic is good and well said , but i would advice you to cut into small 4 lines paragraph and work on your rhyming with it i am sure you willl be perfect i think i will rate fair one for this , when you fix , if you want to fix , PM me to read again !