Hm. This is VERY intersting. I wasn't going to post a comment, but this is simply dumbfounding. It wasn't cliche at all... and the ending was very interesting. One suggestion to make it flawless: Use punctuation. It would help the flow immensly.

Great job. =]

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

Thanks a lot for the comment and suggestion, I reread it and I am not sure where you are talking about I should punctuate. If you give me an example, I will fix it. Thanks again!

Was this a dream? i had a dream like this once. freaked me out ... haven't been to church in a while.. umm yeah great peice though! loved it 5/5

Deep..
awesome
deep
it was great
love the rhyme
and upbeat tempo
good job
PeAcE
5/5

This poem was absolutely amaze'in. Keep it Up. 5/5

Oh my gosh that was brilliant, oh my gosh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Wow. This poem kept me in suspense, and I have to admit that it took my breath away. I really liked the quick, short lines and the rhyming was good as well. I don't know if this was a mockery against the church, or if it was something.. well, I can't exactly say 'good' lol but.. wow. I'm confused now. If you want to send me an email explaining what this poem is about that'd be great. All I can say right now is that I absolutely love this poem.

Take Care and God Bless,
Sarah-Joy