Whisper [Pleiades]

by Tammie   Nov 20, 2006


Walking along the beach
Waves continually crash
We walk hand in hand, I
Whisper I love you. He
Waits a moment, turns with
Watery eyes, and says,
With a smile, love you too.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    A great Pleiades with great emotion showen, usually writers get lost when trying to write for a style rather than the feelings, but you did it, and did it perfectly. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Gem

    I've never seen a poem like this before. You make it look easy
    And you did it justice =)
    Just beautiful..
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 18 years ago

    by Sorefromreality

    Cute. and im not really into the whole following a criteria but u did so well i think. keep it up,
    thx for ur comments,

    love ya lots,
    sore

  • 18 years ago

    by donna

    Short and sweet :] Very cute.. Well done xx

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awh, don't know why this has such a bad rating sweetie. It's really cuuutte. I loved the descriptions you used although a little more detail could have gone into them. The flow was good and you did a good job! Nicely done, 5/5

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