I liked it! The emotions were vivid, the ideas were well thoughtout and this poem, well it was just great!

I love the imagery created here.

The first two lines on each stanza were amazing! It would have liked it to be a little longer (just because it was really good and I wanted to read more =P) but well done.

Amazing job here. The imagery was fantastic! Purely perfect job here. Though I agree I think that it should be a little longer simply because I wanted to read more! You're a very talented writer, keep it up! 5/5

Stephanie

Wonderful job. I like this poem because 1. it's very descriptive, 2. it's short and to the point. Keep it up, sorry for being slow

For such a short poem, it says so much. I love everything about it. It's so detailed & flows nicely. My favorite lines are the second and fourth lines of the second stanza. They really stood out to me. Keep it up hun. =] 5/5

Tammie xo

Great poem, kinda sad though.
Giving into desires, letting immorality win,,! Wow, A description of the human race.

I think you have done another great job here, i really like your word choice to describe the feelings you have, it is great, and also the flow was perfect,
this poem deserve a 5/5.........

Very well~written poem Jessy! I saw your deal in the forum. =] Great job. I like the short sweet and to the point ones! =]
Ciao xx

Awesome! Love your poems. They're amazing! 5/5!
God Bless.

~*TAy*~

Excellent poem.. short.. but it says everything.. 5/5.. :o)

The imagination on this poem is great........keep writing

-Say goodbye and Go :)

Wow. beautifully written.

Demons swarming under her fragile skin
((I liked these lines...))
Secrets in leaking veins, she must never tell
((And loved the way you explained this analogy... Very strong, very nice.))

I liked this. It was different, and it just seemed to flow nicely. The rhyme wasn't noticed for me, which is good for that means it wasn't forced. Good job.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex5.5