Aww bless ya that wasnt sleezy at all, altho i am now kinda scarred from reading that whilst u are sat to the right of me and marcus has just walked off lol IM KIDDIN!
great poem hunni loadsa feeling in that =]=]=]

~*~Jen~*~

Love it!... But then again I love all your poems 5/5 keep writing

sincerely,
Katlyn

I think that is a really nice poem. I don't think it is sleazy at all. I think it shows strong love, with an intimate touch. Your use of words and descriptions were perfect. I really enjoyed reading this. Excellent work! Keep it up. =] 5/5

Tammie

... *pokes you in the eye* ...
Damnit.. you know what? I'm sort of jealous. Because I wrote a poem called "The Games We Play" and it was also an erotic poem, but this one is so much better than mine!!! I don't really like you anymore : P

You definitely ended a heck of a lot better than I did. Grrrrr.. hehe I liked it :) awesome job! .. Name stealerer!!!

I loved this poem because you really captured exactly how it is when we um.................................. great poem babes 5/5

U really have a very unique way of presenting your feelings & experinces...to me this one fits in love category than explicit.

very nicely written
all the best and take care

I really liked this poem. sweet and erotic

Wow thats gud i like urs 2

Wow thats gud i like urs 2

POEM THAT IS

Okay...Well I dont get into the mushy stuff at all. Sex is sex. You can get the same results with an experienced lover. However your innocence is sweet. Your poem rhymed and was kinda in the genre of erotic.

"Fumbling with the key in the door
Anticipation blurring my actions
We fall inside joined at the lip
I've never felt such burning attraction"

^^I adore these opening lines, such beauty and passion right from the opening that I'm instantly hooked.

"Every touch sends shivers through me
Your fingers trace a trail down my spine
Quickly losing items of clothing
What's mine is yours and yours is mine

Your skin feels like fire against my own
Our hearts are beating together as one
Deeper breaths and shuddering moans
This game of love has just begun"

^^I'm finding this piece to become stronger and stronger throughout, and the imagery is beautiful while the emotion is wonderfully portrayed.

"Your eyes shine with unspoken words
Your fingers stroke, tickle and tease
Kissing roughly and softly at once
I succumb to your expertise

I feel your body rise below mine
As we take each other on a special trip
Clutching each other as tight as we can
Locked together in this pleasant grip"

^^ I really like how you're keeping this sensual, I find alot of eroitc poems to end up trashy which kills the meaning but you have a way with words, still I expected no less from you.

"Our bodies pressed so close together
Smouldering kisses fuelled with desire
Mounting passion as we reach the end
I'm surprised the room hasn't set on fire

The game we play is something special
As we fall asleep entwined as a pair
It proves our love and our devotion
Something only the two of us can share... "

^^ What a beautiful way to end this elegant and classy piece.

I love this.