Wow uhhhhh im sorry that happend to you and i know i havnt been online lately i hope ur doing better since this was written quiet a while ago..im still here for you jo

~steph

Hey,
Well i thought you could of thought of a better title then the one you used. Many people dont read poems about self harm. And well the beginging of your poem make it seem as though its a sad love poem. Yet the self harm bit comes as a suprise. So i suggest you change the title and put the message you have at the end. Anyways that said this poem has quite a few spelling errors. I suggest you sue a speel check before submiting work. You have this rhyme scheme going for the first few stanzas but you didnt keep this coming on the last stanza. On the last stanza you also change your structure of the poem. You made them four lines you change to four. I also thought you should of used a variety of punctuation on this. That said the emotion in this poem was real. I know what slef harm is liek so if you need to talk about that PM me. Keep writing. xx