Srry for this 2nd comment but I just noticed a spelling mistake

"Theres that twinkle in your eye," = there's
"I keep fighting" = I kept fighting.. its past tense cause the rest of the poem is in the past.

I really like your interestin gpoint of view.. but I especiall like your third stanza.. it really pulled into it.. god job and keep up the work ... 5/5

Well..again no flow or rhyme and some spelling errors....(in side)...(inside).. Lots of room for improvement...Sorry hun.. I think you should also try to use stronger words..I liked the meaning of the poem..we've all been there ya know??...
Tyanna

'You lying cheat. ' < cheater maybe?

Once again the syllable count didn't work out with this poem. Better than the last because it wasn't four lines, then four, so on.. it was one line, then one the two, and so on.
Great wording once again.
Keep it up. :]

I understand the pain of losing the one you love, there's no worse feeling in the world. But we must learn from our past relationships and we must try and love again and not let past mistakes hold us back. amazing job the words were so heartfelt and true 5/5 GG23

Wow. i loved it. i'm so sorry that you feel that way but i love the way you expressed it. the way you put all the words together it was just perfect.

It hurts me to see you holding hands,
As you pass me by,

my fave lines^_^
i think everyone feels this way about losing someone they love. but the piece was awesome. 5/5

Oh..every girl feels this sometimes...And you know it has no solution to do..I was the theme in this poem..so sad and so sorrowful..It was really beatifully penned
Well done
Sincerely,
Laura

That's a beautiful poem that has heart AND is extremely well written. I can really relate to this poem, and I really enjoyed reading it. Lovely. 5/5

Ravyn

Hey,
an beautiful written poem, with a lot of emotions in it, I think that many can relate to it, I fortunately not, I can better say not yet..
the flow is good, I absolutely adore these lines: For I will never love again,
You broke my heart in two,
I hope your happy,
You lying cheat.
nice work 5/5
kisses stephanie

Another great poem! so powerful and i think its something that most people can relate to!
well done,

i especially liked the last few lines, they had a strong impact =)
well done and stay stong!!

Love
Jacs
xxxx

Another beautiful one! You have a true talent.

It's killing me slowly,
But I don't care,
For I will never love again,
And I have no reason to live,
Without you in my life,

This stanza really shows how much you care, then at the end of the poem you give him what he deserves by calling him a "You lying cheat." Lol. =]

_Amber_

I must admit I was wondering why you were being so accepting at the beginning saying that 'its all fine' and 'dont worry about me' type attitude and I was waiting for your real emotions to come exploding out and then... in the end... I got to see that raw anger, betrayal and jealousy come out in your final words.

:) Good on you.

Mo

I can relate to this extremely.But, honestly the flow was off bad and hard to follow but the word choice was good, as was the emotion.For that I give a 4/5

Wow, I think you portrayed the tenderness along with the hate very well.
The contrast was good, and made the poem interesting.
I enjoyed it, and I thought the emotions and effort really carried this piece.

5.5.
Paula.

This is so deep. It touches me so much. sometimes it's hard to let go off the one we love and that causes great pain. i hope it's not your case. Being this poem touches me, i will forget about some corrections that should be made, i give it a 4.9/5, kel.

This poem is so emotional sad yet sweet at the same time but certainly full of emotions 5/5