This is such a meaningful poem. It's great 5/5 |
by Fazolis
I like this one,i can relate! |
by Barbara Jean
Awwwwwwwwww...... enjoyed it!!!!!! 5555555 |
This is such a heartfelt poem . |
by Teria
Another great poem. |
by Tiny Reader
Not necessarily the best written poem, but this is all about the emotion and it does a great job of conveying it. Simple words, for a simple emotion. Well done. |
by Haven
Almost made me cry, good job, better flow.... |
by Vanessa
O k here we go alright first off you used the words dark and world a lot, you should find synonyms for them, It kind of threw the flow off just a little but, the emtion was heartfelt, and the word choice for the most part was good, but I have seen instances where you have done better, i hope I am not being harsh, or sounding mean, i am just trying to help. Other thatn that work on punction, remeber, . and ect usually mean to take a breath, (pause) try rereading you work, and adding a short pause where you have added all that that was you can tell if it is going to mess the flow up, when others read it. 5/5 |