Whoa!!!!! im soooo in the same place as u!!!!!
but this was a good poem
5/5

jenie

Very good poem. though it confused me at first. Keep up the good work. 5/5

This was a little confusing. I think you could have explained what you mean a little clearer, and the ending seemed a little forced. However, this was a really good try, and even though it wasn't as clear as it could be, I understood where you were coming from.

Good job.

I know the feeling...you want to write something special, maybe for that person you have your eye on, but it just won't come out how you want it to.
In the second stanza it should be "write" instead of "wright."
I liked this, very truthful.